Old:
Duryodhana was very much jealous of Bhima's victories and strength.
Thus he developed a plan. One night he poisoned Bhima's food and threw Bhima's now passed-out body into the jungle.
What Duryodhana did not know was that the Khan, the great king of the tiger, had seen his dirty actions and rescued Bhima. He called upon his fellow tigers to bring Bhima to their kingdom so they could save him.
The tigers gathered and prayed to Parvati to return Bhima. Soon Bhima woke up, but this time with the strength of a 1000 tigers.
He returned victoriously back to the kingdom.
New:
Duryodhana was jealous of Bhima's victories and strength so developed plan. That night he poisoned Bhima and threw Bhima's body into the Aravalli hills of Rajasthan.
However, soon came the great king of the tigers, Khan and his human friend Mowgli. The two set out a plan to save Bhima.
With the help of Akela the wolf and Bagheera the panther, Khan and Mowgli made a potion to revive Bhima. They slowly poured the potion into his mouth and Bhima rose.
Now Bhima had the power of the jungle within him as he headed back to his cousins
Author's Note:
The micro fictions revisions are always difficult to do with the small word count. However, I chose to revise the micro fiction by making the merge between the Mahabharata and Jungle Book closer. I decided to include other characters such as Mowgli, Akela, and Bagheera. Ultimately the story ended the same, but I feel the new characters really add to the short story.
Hey Neal,
ReplyDeleteIt’s crazy that I am reading one your week 12 stories in week 7, that’s really cool that you are so ahead. I really enjoyed reading this micro fiction but as I’m not this far ahead I haven’t read the original. From what I read though I really enjoyed the characters you incorporated. Micro fictions might be one of my favorite things because they are short and sweet. Good luck with whatever else you have left.
Neal, I really enjoyed reading these stories about Bhima enacting vengeance against this who wronged him. In the first story, the tigers saved Bhima from death and helped him return back to full form but this time with immense strength! These characteristics of strength and vengeance are cardinal traits of Bhima and show up in every story that involves him. It was great to read about them here in your stories!
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